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Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by they clothes they wear. Discuss both these views and give your own opiniom. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, plenty of
people
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making up and dressing up under the effect of celebrities and the media’s publicity.
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, some
people
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 even hold
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 belief,
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 they believe the
clothes
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 can be regarded as a criterion for the type of
people
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.
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, others suggest distinguishing, and defining
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 by their wear is quite a weird thought. At present, more and more
people
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 are starting to take note of their dress. The
clothes
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 not only mean beauty but it alludes to
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 person’s taste for
life
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 to some degree. As far as they are concerned, the style of the garments
people
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 wear might expose part of their personalities, hobbies, and attitudes toward
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.
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, smart dressers are believed to have an organized
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, and they are likely to have everything in discipline or they live a minimalist
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. Other than that,
people
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 who are neatly dressed may be meticulous about their
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 quality.
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, as previously mentioned, it is plausible that
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 could keep track of their personal state through
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clothes
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.
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, it is not always relevant to deduce someone by
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 avenue. In regard to
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’s characteristics and temperament, it is hard to decide what kind of
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 they are. The apparel probably tells the basic rhythm,
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people
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 are not able to explore deep parts. In a nutshell, clothing can be
one
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 kind of indication of human beings who belong to what types. I think we ultimately only reach
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’s silhouette. It is futile to discern and understand their advantages and disadvantages.
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, wearing whatever the
clothes
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 are by no means the most important standard.
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task achievement
Although the essay addresses both views and provides a clear opinion, try to use more specific and varied examples to strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Maintain coherence by ensuring that all main points have substantial supporting details. Developing each point further will add depth to your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively outlining the topic and summarizing your perspective.
task achievement
The essay responds directly to the prompt, discussing both perspectives and giving a personal opinion, which is well articulated.

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