In recent years many local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers to do their shopping. Is it a positive or negative development?

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In the past years, individuals shifted their location of shopping from small retail stores to shopping centres, resulting in the shutdown of many local shops. In my opinion,

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trend is affecting negatively the economy in various ways.

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with, small shops closing down have a big influence on the unemployment rates of a country.

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, when retail stores are unable to compete with big malls for not having the enough resources, they are obliged to dismiss all their employees.

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, job opportunities are harder to find, and competition is the work field is higher, especially for individuals who are above years old.

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, newly graduates have it better chance to find a new job vacancy because companies prefer to have youth in their teams due to their adaptability skills, leaving the individuals within the age range above 40 unemployed.

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, large centres can control the market price wise when there is no more competition. To put it differently, it is commonly known that owning a mall or a shop within a centre can lead to high expenses.

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, when competition gets lower large shops increases the prices of their goods in order to start gaining profits.

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, business researchers showed that a very common strategy new business use is to cut their profits to Zero if necessary to attract new customers where they wait for their competitors to close to start increasing the prices gradually. In conclusion, large centres taking over the market, forcing retailers to close their businesses affect the economy in both increases of prices and unemployment rates.

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Topic Vocabulary:

economic decline
job losses
stimulate the economy
consumer convenience
under one roof
lower prices
erode local culture
unique character
carbon emissions
sustainable lifestyle
community hubs
social interactions
community spirit
local engagement
food courts
entertainment areas

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In recent years many local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers to do their shopping. Is it a positive or negative development?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Students should pay their full cost for their own study, because university education benefits individuals rather than society. To what extent you agree or disagree?

Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every yong person how to be a good parent Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent

the growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Countries with long working days are more successful economically, but there are some negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Modern professional women confront a difficulty that men don’t generally face: the struggle to balance the pressures of work and home. In your opinion, how can this difficulty best be ? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own knowledge or experiences.