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In cities there should be many open spaces such as parks and playgrounds. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is a view of must have umpteen vacant places like gardens and sports grounds in cities. I completely agree with the view as the availability of free areas would attract the young ones along with other generations to spend their quality period with their batch mates in various activities. The following paragraphs would elucidate my opinion.
First
 and foremost, the young buds can learn to utilize their precious time in outdoor activities if the playgrounds will be there resulting in better health and healthy minds
instead
 of spending hours in indoor games.
For instance
 Japan trains its young generation in doing more physical work rather than passing time on video games and other technology based activities like mobile phones.
Although
 90% of cell phones with advanced technology is provided by Japan to the whole world, yet it keeps own generation safe by not giving them phones at childhood stage.
Secondly
, the individuals would feel rejuvenated by taking morning walk and
this
 could reflect in their whole busy schedule.
However
, it can happen only if there will be more parks in every colony or society of the city resulting in less diseases like asthma, anxiety, depression and heart strokes.
Furthermore
, the researches show that the person doing regular exercise and morning walks gets their body fit than others as the fresh morning air help their body to become more active and devoid of many common diseases. To conclude, I strongly believe that gardens and
such
 places not only enhance the beauty of the cities but
also
 play the unavoidable role in giving directions to the growing ones towards sports and contribute in keeping the individuals healthy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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