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Global warming is one of the biggest threats to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem?

#threats #environment
Nowadays, the existence of human being is threatened by a serious environmental cause referred to an increase in the temperature of the earth’s atmosphere.
This
 essay will examine the reasons why it is occurring and
also
 addressed some possible solutions. The global average temperature rose significantly during the past century. Scientists claim that most of the temperature increase since the mid 20th century, which is mainly due to the increase in atmospheric greenhouse gas concentrations produced by human activity.
For instance
, forest stores large amount of
carbon
 and
then
 deforestation causes a larger amount of
carbon
 dioxide to be released into the surroundings
as a result
 of which creates the greenhouse effect.
Moreover
, excessive dependence on fossil fuels for cars, public transport and railways which
also
 emits a lot of
carbon
 dioxide into the atmosphere and that
also
 become one of the factors that warming the earth’s surface.
However
, there are some remedies to deal
this
 serious danger to the mankind.
Firstly
, more alternative and natural energy sources should be used. In
this
 case, energy can be harnessed from the sun, wind and water without producing gases and heat.
Secondly
, planting more trees, purchasing energy efficient products, switching off unused devices around us would
also
helps
Suggestion
help
 overcome
this
 issue. Apart from
this
, governments need to enforce
the limits on
Suggestion
limits on the carbon
carbon
 dioxide emissions for the polluting industries in their countries.
Lastly
, people should try to buy cars with the best fuel economy. To conclude,
although
 climate warming is a serious risk, there are some steps that governments and individuals can take to reduce its effects to save
earth
Suggestion
the earth
 as well as future generations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Climate change
  • Earth's atmosphere
  • Carbon dioxide
  • Methane
  • Nitrous oxide
  • Emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy efficiency
  • Afforestation
  • Carbon footprint
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