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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life?

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These
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 people believe that those who have academic qualifications are successful and being a good student is the only way to succeed.
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, I do not agree with
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 view because there are several factors in practical
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 which determine the accomplishment of an individual. I think
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 of the requirements to become successful is hard working.
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, many educational institutes are still following the old-fashioned and outdated methods of teaching;
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 the creativity of many students does not flourish.
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, students' talent is not assessed by schools. The only thing
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 considered is their grade.
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, many students drop out.
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, it is evident that if a person fails in school, it cannot be a sign of intellectual weakness.
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 it indicates some students are not able to benefit from conventional methods of learning. There are
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 many students who fail in school because they have the passion for doing something other than education.
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, many athletes were not interested in study, but when they recognized their talent they succeeded in
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. Plus, they may be good at singing, painting or trading. To be successful in
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,
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 needs to possess some skills and personal traits.
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 of the most valuable things is persistent effort. A person must have the right attitude, determination and willingness to work hard.
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, have some academic certificate increase their chances of success.
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 education could have a positive effect, without hard work and perseverance no
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 can achieve success in
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. In conclusion, failure in school does not mean that people cannot become successful in
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. Academic background could certainly improve a person's chance of achievement
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but it is not the only reason for being successful. There are many important factors
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 as hard working on a regular basis.
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