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Television dominates the free-time for too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s
world
, there’s a
TV
 in every household. Television is used for various entertaining & general awareness purposes like watching movies, drama, news, sports etc. Television has helped in bringing the
world
 together and connecting people. But there’s a saying that “too much of everything is bad”, so people who are watching too much of the television in their free
time
 or in most of their
time
, it has made them lazy and they are restricted to one place only because of which they don’t interact with the outside
world
.
Firstly
, I would like to highlight that people are becoming lazy because of their exposure to too much of television.
For Example
 – I have one nephew, who is in Class 5, once he is back from school at 2 PM, he starts watching
TV
 until 6 PM
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.e. 4 hours of his productiveness.
Moreover
,
this
 continuous exposure of 4 hours makes him lethargic and he is not able to do any other task until he goes to sleep.
In addition
 to
this
, he has started having headaches from
last
 1 month now.
Secondly
,
this
 habit of watching
TV
 in free
time
 has made people disconnected with the outside
world
, now people are much more restricted to their own home and comfort zone. Continuing with the above example of my nephew, as he spends most of his free
time
 in front of television so that’s why he is not able to go to dance class, singing class etc. Where if he would have gone, he could have made & met more people and would have made friends. But eventually
TV
 disconnected him from the outside
world
. To conclude, to avoid these harms of watching too much
TV
, one needs to regulate and limit their exposure to
TV
.
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