It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

children
Suggestion
Children
should learn right and wrong
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
from childhood. Some people think that
punishment
is the best way to make them do the right thing. I do not agree that
punishment
is a good method of teaching them
this
distinction.
first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
of all,
punishment
can negatively affect the feelings of the child. Parents should be more creeping because young children don't understand anything.
First
of all,
punishment
can negatively affect the feelings of the child. Parents need to be more forgiving, because little kids do not understand anything.
for
Suggestion
For
example, if a child breaks a mug, grown ups should not punish him physically, they should be told that
next
time he should be careful.
also
Suggestion
Also
, if he uttered a censored word, parents are best advised to explain to them that it is wrong to use
such
words to really help them understand that
such
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
is wrong.
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