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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#inventors #society #doctors
It is true that investors and doctors are important for our world. Nowadays
,
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,
we live
Innovation century
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Innovation, century
. It had built by investors,
likewise
 our health depending on doctors.
However some
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However, some
 people believe that doctors are more important than investors. I
donot
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do not
 agree
this
 meditation. In
this
 essay I will give some of
argument
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the argument
 on
this
 topic. On the one hand, it can be argued that Investors organize big part of our nowadays
life
. 21 century is the age of light technology. The country which is without investors, could not do anything for being one of the developed countries.
However there
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However, there
 are some of
negative effects
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the negative effects
 they need more and more budgets to create new technologies. So it
maybe
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may be
 impossible for poor countries.
On the other hand
, some people argued that doctors are important for us. People would be
extected
considered likely or probable to happen or arrive
expected
 dramatically without doctors. In my opinion, doctors may create new ways to treat and they could investors on their profession.
In addition
, investors rely on their own
life
 to doctors.
However there
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However, there
 are some
of negative sides
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negative sides
. Main side is their the least work could be the cause of sadly end. To conclude, Investors are important to social
life
 as doctors. Without doctors and investors our today's
life
 style would be imploded. The contribution of investors and doctors is big to be one of the developed countries.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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