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The uses of social media, such as Facebook, Twitter, are replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this way outweigh the disadvantages

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In recent years, people tend to use social networks to communicate
instead
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 of talking in real life.
Although
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 doing
this
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 has several advantages, the drawbacks of it are far more significant  There are some benefits which can be reaped from using social networks.
Firstly
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, people who live far from home can keep in touch with family in order to make
family bond
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the family bond
 stronger.
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 lead
to
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until
 they will feel comfortable and relieve stress, so they work
more productivity
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more productively
more productive
. Another drawback could be that social network sites help new students to make friends easily in
new college
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the new college
.
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, they will have interesting in
study
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the study
 and they may be gain scholarship  
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, using social networks can have some serious downsides, which overshadow these positive impacts. One disadvantage which should be considered is that using social networks regularly,
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 as Facebook and Twitter, can
results
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result
 in a lack of confidence in real-life conversation.
This
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 makes people who are just chatting online feel depressed, so they will fall behind with studies and get bad grades.
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, important information of users, which provided to create an account or login, can be stolen by
hacker
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hackers
a hacker
 so as to do illegal activities.
This
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 can result in damage to their daily work. By working in a bad mood, victims have low productivity and they earn less money and not promoted.  In conclusion, despite the advantages that communicating on social networks can bring, it still does more harm than good.

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