Being a celebrity can bring benefits and problems at the same time. To what extent do you agree on this statement?

Although
there is no doubt that
startdom
the status of being acknowledged as a star
stardom
can be advantageous, it is
also
important to
considered
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consider
that troubles are
also
part of it. In my opinion, I completely
disgree
be of different opinions
disagree
with the above statement and
this
essay will discuss and support my stand.
To begin
with, famous personality have
more rewarding life
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a more rewarding life
than any common person.
Firstly
, they have all the fame and
addulation
servile flattery; exaggerated and hypocritical praise
adulation
from fans across the country, people are mostly influenced by their word, and they are highly paid for
minimilistic
act.
Secondly
, Many advertising
agency
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agencies
only prefer celebrities for
propogating
transmit from one generation to the next
propagating
a product. For Instances, Colgate the toothpaste company never had a famous actor doing their campaign,
however in
Accept comma addition
however, in
recent years they
also
have started
prefering
like better; value more highly
preferring
preparing
referring
booming starts for their advertisement.
As a result
, famous person has both a
celebrity
status and money.
Furthermore
, prominent personalities have
support
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the support
of the political parties and these governing bodies prefer the outspoken people for their campaign for which they are
heavyly paid
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paid heavily
heavily paid
.
on
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On
the other hand, with all of
benefits
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the benefits
some problems are
also
attached
such
as media harassment,
paparazzi
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the paparazzi
have been a very damaging to some
celebrity
,
such
as
princess
a female member of a royal family other than the queen (especially the daughter of a sovereign)
Princess
Diana, the team of photographs
were following
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was following
her in the car to click her photos, in order to avoid it the driver took a different route and they might the deadly accident, but these are rare cases. Overall,
celebrity
enjoy and they rarely have any problems comparing it to the normal person. To conclude
this
, with great power comes
the great
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greater
responsiblity
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
and
celebrity
are well aware how to
encash
enclose in, or as if in, a case
encase
these opportunity
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this opportunity
these opportunities
, without being in any trouble.
Therefore
, I disagree that
celebrity
have
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has
problems and benefits at the same time.
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