Being a celebrity can bring benefits and problems at the same time. To what extent do you agree on this statement?

Although

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there is no doubt that

startdom

the status of being acknowledged as a star

stardom

can be advantageous, it is

also

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important to

considered

Suggestion

consider

that troubles are

also

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part of it. In my opinion, I completely

disgree

be of different opinions

disagree

with the above statement and

this

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essay will discuss and support my stand.

To begin

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with, famous personality have

more rewarding life

Suggestion

a more rewarding life

than any common person.

Firstly

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, they have all the fame and

addulation

servile flattery; exaggerated and hypocritical praise

adulation

from fans across the country, people are mostly influenced by their word, and they are highly paid for

minimilistic

Suggestion

act.

Secondly

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, Many advertising

agency

Suggestion

agencies

only prefer celebrities for

propogating

transmit from one generation to the next

propagating

a product. For Instances, Colgate the toothpaste company never had a famous actor doing their campaign,

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however in

Accept comma addition

however, in

recent years they

also

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have started

prefering

like better; value more highly

preferring

preparing

referring

booming starts for their advertisement.

As a result

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, famous person has both a

celebrity

Use synonyms

status and money.

Furthermore

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, prominent personalities have

support

Suggestion

the support

of the political parties and these governing bodies prefer the outspoken people for their campaign for which they are

heavyly paid

Suggestion

paid heavily

heavily paid

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Suggestion

the other hand, with all of

benefits

Suggestion

the benefits

some problems are

also

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attached

such

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as media harassment,

paparazzi

Suggestion

the paparazzi

have been a very damaging to some

celebrity

Use synonyms

such

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princess

a female member of a royal family other than the queen (especially the daughter of a sovereign)

Princess

Diana, the team of photographs

were following

Suggestion

was following

her in the car to click her photos, in order to avoid it the driver took a different route and they might the deadly accident, but these are rare cases. Overall,

celebrity

Use synonyms

enjoy and they rarely have any problems comparing it to the normal person. To conclude

this

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, with great power comes

the great

Suggestion

greater

responsiblity

the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force

responsibility

and

celebrity

Use synonyms

are well aware how to

encash

enclose in, or as if in, a case

encase

these opportunity

Suggestion

this opportunity

these opportunities

, without being in any trouble.

Therefore

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, I disagree that

celebrity

Use synonyms

have

Suggestion

has

problems and benefits at the same time.

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Nov 19, 2019

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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279 words

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