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Some believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time . This can benefit teenagers and the community as well . Do you agree or disagree.

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Some people believe that teenagers should be asked to do
community
work
 in their leisure time because of their benefits and the
c
ommunity's
Suggestion
community
b
enifits.
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
 In my point of view, i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
partly agree with the opinion that the youth should take part in some
community
work
. I
n
Suggestion
On
the one hand, joining unpaid
community
work
 provides to teenagers many u
sefull
being of use or service
useful
experiences. They need to do some physical jobs that they d
o not do
Suggestion
have not done
before
such
 as cleaning the dirty roads, helping poor people in p
ublic area,
Suggestion
public areas
a public area
...
In addition
, they n
ot only realize
Suggestion
don't only realize
aren't only realizing
the purpose of their lives and how lucky they are, but the youth
also
 develop some necessary soft skills
such
 as teamwork, communication.
For example
, if young people join a c
ampain
a race between candidates for elective office
campaign
company
that provide foods for homeless people at midnight, they could have chances to see that how lucky they are when they have their own house or still have their families, which makes them appreciate everything that they have already had. I
n
Suggestion
On
the other side, doing unpaid social
work
 depends on their choices;
therefore
, r
equirement
Suggestion
requiring
the teenagers for doing it is not necessary.
Besides
 doing social
work
, they have a range of works that they want to do in their leisure time.
For instance
, in their free time, they tend to do some hobbies or follow their passion
such
 as drawing, painting or singing that could help them develop their own skills and unwind stress
instead
 of doing the
community
work
. To sum up, doing u
npaid social
Suggestion
the unpaid social work
work
 will b
enifits
Suggestion
benefit
benefits
for teenagers and the
community
 in various ways. H
ovewer,
Suggestion
However
 parents should e
counrage
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
them to take part in and let them choose what they want to do rather than requiring them to do it.
Submitted by cr7.linhh on

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