We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Recently, there has been many opinions say that due to our inability to help everyone in other countries, we should only take care of our own communities and countries.

However

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view and think that we should devote ourselves to help as many people as possible.

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, despite our thoughts, help is being needed in many nations and cities in the word.

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, in these years, many countries have been struggling with various severe problems

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as poverty, starving people, contaminated water sources and more.

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, with the problems being worse and worse due to climate change, lack of financial resources, governments in these countries are slowly losing their control over the issues.

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, support from the international communities is greatly required for these countries. Being the ones who have better living conditions, it is our responsibility to provide help for these people.

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, helping others can come from simple and little actions that will not make us any difficult to do. Specifically, it can be small donations of money

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from saving daily costs, sending clothes that we no longer wear to the needy or even take part in some small

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volunteer

events.

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this

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does not seem much for an individual, if everyone in a community

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realizes

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and together join the activities, it can create unexpected results that would be really meaningful to those countries or communities that receive the support.

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but not least,

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it is impossible for one to help solving problems all over the world, the miracle can be created if we believe and together create the changes.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

271 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

global interconnectivity
international cooperation
ethics
moral obligation
geographical borders
diplomatic relations
economic stability
global security
resource allocation
expertise
international aid
dependency and development
sustainable solutions
local and global initiatives
community resilience

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We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some employers involve employees in the decision-making process of products and services. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage?

ln the future, it seems it would be more difficult to live in the North. Some people think more money should be spent researching other panels to live such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?