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Most people accept that we now live in a globalised world but not everyone agrees this is beneficial. To what extent is globalisation a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answers and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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The world witnessed a lot of diverse developments in the 21st century. One
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 important development is
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globalisation
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 and it has influenced every aspect of life. Many people are excited about living in a globalized world, yet a few people believe that globalization is not beneficial. A careful analysis shows that
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globalisation
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 has both merits and demerits.
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Globalisation
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 offers us a plethora of merits. The most important one among them is the easy availability of services and products. It is because of
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globalisation
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, the services or products available only in selected countries are now available around the world.
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 an Apple iPhone gets its motherboard and the phone body manufactured in
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the USA
 and China respectively.
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 gets assembled in another
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 where it is sold.
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Globalisation
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 has an additional advantage of increasing the employment opportunities in developing and
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
 countries.
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Globalisation
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 helps to reduce the price of products by getting them manufactured in countries where the labour cost is low. On the flip side, the negative aspects of
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globalisation
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 cannot be wished away / cannot be overlooked. It interferes with the tradition, culture and the way of living of a
country
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 in which it is implemented.
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Globalisation
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 enables multinational companies to exploit the natural resources of poor countries. To consider an example, beverage companies established in India have their presence in river beds. They consume gallons of water and affect the agricultural activity, which is the backbone of the
country
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globalisation
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 alters the existing activity in a
country
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 to bring in a new service. To recapitulate, even though
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globalisation
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 has become essential for the ease of living, it
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 endangers the way of life in many countries.

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