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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that,
since
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for
 several centuries, the environment
is
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has been
 in danger. Nowadays, some people think that the decrease in the number of some types of animals and plants is the main problem in that danger. While others believe that there are other things which can be more important environmental problems. In
this
 essay I am going to discuss both sides and draw my personal conclusion. Speaking of problems, human beings are
one
 of the biggest reasons of the problems. The main reason given to support
this
 claim is the climate change which has been recently being danger on the nature. To illustrate, the behaviours of some people
such
 as cutting an entire forest and the traffic pollution could have a huge effect on the environment.
In other words
, people should really know what they are doing because these behaviours are
one
 of the important problems
on
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with
 the nature issue.
Hence
 the belief that human beings are playing a big role in
this
 cause.
However
, it should not be forgotten that the losing of rare species of animals and plants is very dangerous.
For example
, the big fishes eat the smaller fishes, if there are no more small fishes the big
one
 will die.
In other words
, the life circle of plants and animals is linked with each other. So,
one
 error in
this
 circle will be
problem
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problematic
 on the nature and on the human beings. In conclusion, after a care full analysis of both views, I believe that there are more important environmental problems,
such
 as the human being’s behaviours.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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