Modern technology now allows rapid an uncontrolled Access to exchange of information.Far from being beneficial, this is a danger to our societies. What are your views?

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We live in an age when many of us

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modern

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which allows to access any

information

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, and

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technology

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also

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can be used for exchanging

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rapidly.But there is a question, How are our societies affected by these improvements?. One

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which is unacceptable is access to our personal data. The other important

problem

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can be sharing the

government

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privacy documents.In

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essay these problems will be discussed. One of the biggest problems of modern

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is that all of our personal

information

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are on the internet. And a person who knows how to hack and get

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information

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can learn them, and attempt to

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them.

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, if a foreign person, who got all our bank account

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such

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as passwords, bank card number and so on, they are able to

use

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them if they want, as far as the limit of the card is enough

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this

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person can buy anything he/she needs. Despite police officers

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he/she can do anything using our

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in an official way.

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, we should pay attention to these kind of problems,

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we can be guilty

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and foremost

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is that knowing privacy documents of the

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is the biggest

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of the system. If these documents are shared by someone with other countries, the

government

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can be under super danger.

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, let’s think that military projects of any

government

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are known by rival countries, one of rival countries can

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them against the management

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these projects can be invented by rivals before the

government

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.Even if it understood

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matter, there can be nothing to do about

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situation.

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, the administration should keep these problems in mind all the time. In summary,

technology

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has been growing and much

information

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about us has been shared by our hands or anyone else.My own view on the matter is

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we should keep in mind every time and we should pay attention to sharing something important to us.

celik.faruk1993Thu Nov 28 2019

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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