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While some people think that the problem with education in poor countries is the teaching methodology used, other believe it is the lack of resources that is the real issue. Discuss both sides.

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It has often been argued by some people that the primary issue associated with the
education
 of developing countries is the methods of teaching, whereas some folks firmly say that shortage of teaching resources is the main reason. On one hand,
firstly
 the poor countries follow the traditional methods of teaching which completely emphasize on imparting theoretical knowledge and lacks in providing practical understanding.
Thus
, it becomes an uphill task for the student to become proficient in the respective subject.
For example
, a study by Oxford university has proved that student learn better when they perform practical of the things they have studied in the class.
Secondly
, due to low remuneration and stiff competition in the
education
 sector, no one want to adopt teaching as their profession.
On the other hand
, lack of resources is
also
 considered to be the real problem for the developing nations. The introduction of technology in the
education
 domain has brought many wonders.
However
, due to the hefty cost of the technology it becomes difficult for the poor countries to afford
such
 expenses.
For instance
, many countries do not have the access to the internet because of its expensive price.
In addition
 to
this
, the poor nations are
also
 not capable of providing basic amenities
such
 as smart libraries, school buildings and computer labs as they do not have enough money resources. In conclusion, I assert that the old teaching methods and insufficient resources are putting a negative impact on the
education
 system of the developing countries which results in low economic growth of poor nations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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