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Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People have
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 views with regard to the question of how
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making
 our
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 safer. In my view, both punishments and a range of other measures can be used together to promote better driving habits. On the one hand, strict punishments can
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 help to encourage people to drive more safely. Penalties for dangerous drivers can act as a deterrent, meaning that people avoid repeating the same offence. There are various types of driving penalty,
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 as small fines, licence suspension, driver awareness courses, and even prison sentences. The aim of these punishments is to show dangerous drivers that their actions have negative
concequences
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
consequences
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, we would hope that drivers become more disciplined and alert, and that they follow the rules more carefully.
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, safe driving can be promoted in several different ways that do not punish drivers.
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, it is vitally important to educate people properly before they start to drive, and
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 can be done in schools or even as part of an extended or more difficult driving test.
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, more attention could be paid to safe
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 design.
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, signs can be used to warn people, speed bumps and
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 bends can be added to calm traffic, and speed cameras can help to deter people from driving too quickly.
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,
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
 or local councils can reduce
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 accidents by investing in better public transport, which would mean that fewer people would need to travel by car. In conclusion, while punishments help to prevent bad driving, I believe that other
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 safety measures should
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 be introduced.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent
  • repeat offenses
  • infrastructure improvements
  • public awareness campaigns
  • reckless driving
  • traffic management technologies
  • intelligent traffic lights
  • speed cameras
  • public transportation
  • minimize
  • enhance safety
  • allocate funds
  • road signs
  • road safety
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