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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some would argue that children should be grown up in a competitive environment. Others think that adolescents who are taught to be cooperative become more useful adults. While competition prepares children to face a tough adult
life
, I believe cooperation teaches juveniles to be receptive. One the one hand, competition makes children to get used to face a tough adult
life
.
This
 is to say that children who are used to competitive environment do not have to struggle later in practical
life
.
For example
, recent research of the University of Karachi revealed that children who are brought up in competitive environment have 40% more chance of getting a job as compared to those who were not taught to be competitive in their childhood.
However
, it does not prepare children to face all the problems of
life
.
On the other hand
, a sense of cooperation teaches children to be open to others’ ideas.
This
 is to say that children who are receptive make more friends in their
life
 because when a child accepts the others point of view than the children around him start to like him and
this
 ability helps that child going to the executive position later in
life
.
For instance
, a survey conducted by the University of Delhi shows that 70% of people who acquired the executive positions in large organizations in India are very cooperative and down to earth. I agree with
this
 opinion because to be cooperative solve many problems in
life
. In conclusion,
although
 some say that adolescents are motivated to become competitive because it helps them to tackle tough problems of
life
, I firmly believe that teaching cooperation is more important to make children better people later in their lives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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