Some say that young people are not suitable for decision-making positions in governments, others, however disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Whether or not the young can work efficiently has always been one of the controversial issues. Young people are considered unsuitable for decision-making roles in the authority by some people,
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for another group of people the young can be a part of authority as well. Owing to lack of
experience
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and being indecisive, the young might not be able to work in governing positions,
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I assume that
having modern point of view and need of lucrative
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will modern point of view and need of lucrative job make
has modern point of view and need of lucrative job made
was modern point of view and need of lucrative job making
is modern point of view and need of lucrative job making
was modern point of view and need of lucrative job made
having modern point of view and need of lucrative job make
job
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make decision-making positions suitable for young generation. As young people are inexperienced and bad at making decisions, they may not be able to do
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challenging jobs. Being inexperienced can make it difficult to fin solutions in
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fearful
fear
feared
hard
situations. Overcoming challenges demands life
experience
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which is considerably
little
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less
fewer
in young people.
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, encountering with hardship in governing, they will not know what to do.
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, in Bangladesh a 27-year old man was assigned as a minister several decades ago and his lack of
experience
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resulted in unrest among
people
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the people
. If he had
experience
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,
this
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kind of situation would not happen.
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, being indecisive
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plays an essential role in the young’s inability to do an authoritative
job
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. Unlike aged people, young generation change their opinions easily, and it can affect not only young people’s position in the government, but
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the future of the country. Their wrong decision can cause conflicts and disturbance. Despite the reasons that were mentioned above, there may be some points,
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as need of well-paying
job
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and modern outlook, that make the young suitable for governmental positions. To have good living conditions, young people need a high-paying
job
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.
The higher
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The highest
position in the government the young have, the more money they will earn.
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, modernity is
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important in ruling the country. Compared to old people, the young have more modern general knowledge. It can lead to the enhancement of the country.
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, after having a young Minister of Foreign Affairs,
annual income
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the annual income
of Norway increased. In conclusion,
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the young may not fit into ruling positions due to not having
experience
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and not being able to make decision, I strongly believe that it is better to have more young people in the government
for
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of
their need of money and modernity.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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