More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by modern life style which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encourage. What extent do you agre?

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Has been growing the number of people that have been
gotten
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getting
sick because modern lifestyle requires too much of them.
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they have looked for new medicines, in my opinion, they might be much
successful
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more successful
if they would
receiving
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receive
traditional care
instead
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of new and sometimes expensive treatments.
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, many of these new branded drugs are still in research analyses,
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, they could have not fit perfectly for the patient.
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to
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, traditional treatments are still valid and they have been prescribed with success for many years. Studies have shown the
majors
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major
pharmaceutical industries have invented strong medicines in the
lastest
up to the immediate present; most recent or most up-to-date
latest
lasted
four decades rather than new laboratories in the
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five years. Those facts are the main proof that traditional drugs are indeed the best treatment that we can have received. We can pick up a well know case as Alzheimer’s Disease. While new laboratories had advertised about special drugs can be implanted in the body as a microchip, and
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gradually released the medicine, regular pills already did
this
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when they are solving in the stomach with no harm and lower cost.
Such
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as Alzheimer’s, other degenerative diseases are being treated in the same way with a huge success. Apart from the innovation in the medical field is always welcome, we have faced some realities as if they are really delivering concrete results or having a lack of credibility and making more noise rather
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then
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positive results. As a part of a pretty committed community, I think we should get more involved with medical researches to address
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question and, certainly, would be received better traditional treatments for everybody.

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