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People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Attending
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collage
the body of faculty and students of a college
college
 is one of the most exciting milestones in the life young men and women.
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 there are many reasons why people prefer to go to
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collage
the body of faculty and students of a college
college
, I believe educational and professional opportunities, as well as new social experiences are the most
imprtant
of great significance or value
important
 considerations. In the following essay, I will provide specific reasons and examples to support my answer. One of the most important reasons in my opinion people go to
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collage
the body of faculty and students of a college
college
, is that it provides a strong educational foundation for the
students
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students'
student's
 future career. By going to
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collage
the body of faculty and students of a college
college
, students get familiarized with the technical knowledge and professional jargon, which allows them to enter the job market faster.
This
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 is especially important for students who are interested in subjects like
engeneering
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
engineering
 and computer science where it is vital to gain
broad technical foundation
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a broad technical foundation
 early, in order to find a good job.
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, students who are interested in laboratory work and research,
such
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 as biology, microbiology and physics prefer to go to
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collage
the body of faculty and students of a college
college
 due to the laboratory support given, and the ability to conduct research with other institutes. These
colaborations
act of working jointly
collaborations
celebrations
calibrations
 are available mostly in collages
,
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,
 and are
exteremely
to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect
extremely
imprortant
of great significance or value
important
 to students who are interested in promoting their academic career. Aside
from
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for
 educational reasons, I believe social experiences are as important for young people when considering
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collage
the body of faculty and students of a college
college
. Students are eager to go to
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collage
the body of faculty and students of a college
college
 in order to live outside of the
families
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family
 comfort area, and
experince
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experience
 adulthood.
This
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 can be seen by the high
precentage
a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)
percentage
 of students nowadays, who prefer to rent an apartment outside of
collage
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, and work during their educational period.
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, social life in
collage
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 provides the opportunity to meet new people from different parts of the world, and create new relationships. According to the New York Times, meeting new friends was the most common reason for teenagers to apply for
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collage
the body of faculty and students of a college
college
.
This
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 demonstrates that social experiences
is
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are
 a vital consideration when
applaying
put into service; make work or employ for a particular purpose or for its inherent or natural purpose
applying
 to
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collage
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the college
the collage
. In conclusion, I believe the educational and professional opportunities, as well as new social experiences are the main reasons students attend
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collage
the body of faculty and students of a college
college
. Regardless of the reason, I believe
collage
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 is an
imprtant
of great significance or value
important
 aspect in the
preperation
the activity of putting or setting in order in advance of some act or purpose
preparation
proportion
 of young people into adulthood.
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