Some people think that public health within a country can be improved by government making laws regarding nutritious food. Others, however, think that health is a matter of personal choice and responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Good
Health
Use synonyms
is a key of better future people are differ in their
opinion some
Accept comma addition
opinion, some
people blame the
government
Use synonyms
for their
health
Use synonyms
and some do not take care about
them selves
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
, it shows up individually and to all,
health
Use synonyms
is very important
this
Linking Words
essay will discuss both
point
Suggestion
points
of view in following paragraph Today, people are very cautious with their
health
Use synonyms
, they go to
gym
Suggestion
the gym
and do so many
exercise but
Suggestion
exercises, but
exercises but
after that they
are eat
Suggestion
are eating
have eaten
fast-
food
Use synonyms
or etc.., in
this
Linking Words
situation they are more responsible for their
health
Use synonyms
than
government
Use synonyms
.
Government
Use synonyms
can't monitor the
lifestyle
Use synonyms
of people. They make
alot
Suggestion
a lot
of
laws but
Accept comma addition
laws, but
people ignore it and do illegal things,
for example
Linking Words
- in
gujarat
a region of western India to the north of Bombay (bordering the Arabian Sea) where Gujarati is spoken
Gujarat
,
Accept space
,
alcohol is prohibited but people use it as opposed to
government
Use synonyms
. No matter how many laws are passed and how strictly
government
Use synonyms
monitors
Suggestion
monitor
food
Use synonyms
quality, if people do not follow the healthy
lifestyle
Use synonyms
, they will surely suffer from diseases. On the other side,
government
Use synonyms
also
Linking Words
a reason of unhealthy
lifestyle
Use synonyms
, they should
bane
forbid the public distribution of(a movie or a newspaper)
ban
on junk
food
Use synonyms
, chemical
food
Use synonyms
etc..
Use synonyms
Government
Suggestion
The government
should make various laws against unhealthy foods, they encourage people with a lot of ways,
for example
Linking Words
, they make
short film
Suggestion
a short film
short films
, drama related to healthy
food
Use synonyms
habits, they
also
Linking Words
involve it in school course. They inspect all the
food
Use synonyms
before provide. They should penalize people who consume alcoholic beverages
.
Accept space
.
To sum up, i think that
government
Use synonyms
should ensure hygienic in
food
Use synonyms
products and people
also
Linking Words
use healthy
lifestyle
Use synonyms
, they both are very important for promoting the public
health
Use synonyms

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: