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There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company. Some believe that money is the main reason. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that people do not want to
change
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 their
job
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 because of the salary they get from their current employers,
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, there are some other advantages of doing
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job
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a job
the job
jobs
 for the same company. People prefer to do
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job
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jobs
 for the same organization because they are afraid of
change
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 and they have medical facilities in their old
job
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. The primary reason of working for the same company is that people do not want to
change
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 their
lives
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life's
life
 patterns.
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 to say that most people become habitual of same
routine work
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routine, work
 and they are afraid of doing some other
job
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. They just want to do the same work on
daily basis
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a daily basis
 and do not want any
change
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 in their lives.
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, a recent report
of
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by
 the Jang newspaper revealed that 48% of people do not
change
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 their
job
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 just because they are afraid of changing their daily routine. The
second
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 main reason is that they have to leave the medical benefits for some time.
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, the new company does not give them that privilege from the start of their
job
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 and they have to wait for the provisional time period so they can get medical and other benefits.
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, there is a law in Pakistan that an employee can only eligible for medical benefit after working 3month for the same organization. In conclusion,
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 a lot of people think that people want to do the same
job
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 for their whole lives just because of money, they are afraid of
change
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 and
also
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 have to give up the medical benefits for
particular time period
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a particular time period
.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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