Prison is the comman way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people a better education. Do you agree or disagree?
In
this
day and age, crime
rates have surged dramatically and committing misdeeds also
has become so normal for offenders in most countries. It is argued that confinement is one of the best measures for guilt to resolve the issue. While
others believe that ensuring a quality education
to
inmates is a great option. I completely agree with Change preposition
for
this
thought and believe that providing ample amount of education
, support
and vocational training along with
imprisonment prevents the criminal from committing the crime
in future and afterwards helps the offender to be a responsible citizen.
To begin
with, confinement is believed to be a most imperative system
of organization which helps to maintain law and order. In fact, confinement alone will not deter crimes
and criminals, it rather makes them more violent and prone to harm the other inmates behind bars. A good support
system
, appropriate knowledge and vocational training will help them to abide by the behavioural conditions and lead them to do good deeds, improve bad habits and change their mindset over time in jail. For example
, A research paper on " the effects of education
on crime
" suggests that the probability of committing crimes
like shoplifting, Vandalism, threat, assault and injury decreases with years of education
and training in prison. Therefore
, higher education
is a must for people
to have more permissive attitudes and social norms towards criminal behaviour.
Moreover
, A number of individuals are compelled to do an unlawful act. Offenders often tend to break the law due to
their bad living conditions such
as poverty, unemployment and illiteracy, after all, they never want to live in such
miserable situations. Helping people
in need, providing proper education
to people
and having scientific support
for law enforcement indeed deters the crime
rates and improves the system
of the country. In addition
, children also
need to be educated about society's norms and aware of the laws to prevent the risks of juvenile delinquency. A recent study in 2022, found that spending time behind bars in a Norwegian prison reduces the risk that a criminal will commit future crimes
. Thus
, people
will think twice about committing crimes
as it is a deterrent to the future.
In conclusion, appropriate education
, a good support
system
and vocational training help the offenders to improve themselves and it also
deters crime
and criminals from doing misdeeds I firmly agree with the statement mentioned above.Submitted by asmitakhatri490 on
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