Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

It is often argued that the sole reason for learning a non-native language by a person is for travelling either for a job or a vacation while others say that there must be more reasons
besides
the mentioned ones.
This
essay believes that a student who intends to go to a foreign country to study
also
needs to learn that country's language like Mandarine if he wants to study in China because it becomes easier to communicate within and outside the school. On the one hand, some people believe that a sense of competition motivates pupils to work harder.
This
is to say that, in order to get an ace in a class, students study hard and become target-oriented, and
this
practice will eventually become their habit, which makes them more successful in life.
For example
, a recent survey found that around 30% of Cambridge University students were a consistent topper in their elementary and secondary school;
therefore
, they believe that due to their habit of competition, they are studying in Cambridge today.
On the other hand
, a sense of cooperation enables children to become generous and caring. They always prefer to work in a team and considerate every team member's feelings by listening and helping them.
Therefore
,
this
practice will help young people to become more balanced adults.
For instance
, the American Heart and stroke foundation revealed in a recent survey that over 60% of volunteers are those who always encouraged to help others since they were a child. For
this
reason,
this
essay believes that with cooperation, an individual can not only excel in life but get respect from others. In conclusion, I b
elieve
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believe, although
although
, it's essential to instill a sense of competition for the children, a spirit of cooperation is more helpful to make them a responsible human being as a whole.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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