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Most people prefer ready to eat food rather than homemade food now. Do you think it has more advantages or more disadvantages.

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Technology has drastically changed, an individual's preference. Presently many people have started to prefer ready eat
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 than homemade
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 preference has its own advantages and disadvantages.
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 is,
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 available in the packet form and requires minimum preparation
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. It is convenient to get the ready eat
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 from the market and eat it, rather than bringing all raw materials and
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 cook it, like in case of homemade
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. Ready to eat
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 is a good option for the students and persons who are living alone and far from their family. Another plus point of
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 is
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 saving. People who are working hard and not getting sufficient
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 to cook, can easily fulfil their energy supply by ready
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. So
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 has its own benefits in todays' fast running life.
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 comes with so many benefits, there are drawbacks which are noticeable. One disadvantage of eating the packed
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 is health issues. As
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 is prepared and packed for a long
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, so many chemicals are used as preservatives and somewhere it is
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 lacking nutrients. Like many times we heard in the news that some packed
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 was contaminated as well as not up to the standard.
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 causes many health complications in a long term. Another negative point is,
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 makes people lazy. If prepared
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 is available so easily, who will prefer to invest his energy in cooking? Like according to Harward university's research, 70% youth eats ready
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 in spite of homemade and
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 habit leading to them towards obesity. Every coin has its pros and cons, so the ready
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 has the same. I think disadvantages of the packed
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 are more alarming than the advantages as people are getting unhealthy and lazy.
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