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In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.

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In today's world, we cannot deny that technology has a private role in our lives. People use technology to help them to use their task faster than the past. But a controversial question that arises among people is whether we should
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 quickly and take risks, even though we do our
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 by inaccuracy. Some people believe that speed is very fundamental in today's world, so we should do our
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 as soon as possible. The other people think that if you accept one task you should do it correctly and it is more important than speed. I agree with the
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 because of two crucial reasons. In what follows, I will pinpoint my causes. The
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 noteworthy reason is that some of the mistakes are irreparable and the companies or people should spend a lot of money or hour to fix the problem.
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, I think each person should do his or her job correct, even though he or she spent plenty of day on that.
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, my friend Zahra worked for a famous company in Tehran. She always is in a hurry and did her task quickly without any precise. One day he made a bad mistake in her calculation and the company loses a lot of its investment because of her mistake.
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, my friend fired and the company spent a lot of money to compensate for the fault of her. The
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 convincing reason is that in the end, we can say that the people who
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 slower and more accurate than other people can save more time. A
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 of scientists at Harvard University designs an experiment about
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 issue. They investigate two groups of people. The
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 consists of people who do more risk in comparison to the other groups. At the end of the experiment, people, who did the risk, did much more mistakes and they force to compensate for their mistake.
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, the groups who
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 slower finished their general works sooner than the
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. In short, all the reasons, as mentioned above, lead us to the conclusion that we should do our
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 slowly and correctly. If we did our works correct, we will get a better result in the end.
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