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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In some countries, people are earning good salaries.
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 progressively increase in high salaries is preferred by some people, there are others who firmly believe that incomes should be controlled by governments. In my opinion, I believe that having income regulations is essential for high-risk sectors while earning high salaries is good for the
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's economy. Many think it will provide a fair treatment and equality for people by having restraint in earnings by government.
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, each rank or designation should have equal salaries,
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 approach will not only get rid of partiality or jealousy between colleagues but
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 cannot differentiate the risk each employee takes.
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, Field Army who has the same rank must have equal salary because each soldier equally risk their lives.
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, if an employee does some extraordinary work he/she should be given recognition awards/rewards among their department to have a motivational pitch among themselves. Whereas, some believe that people earning an extremely high salary will be beneficial for a
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 in many ways.
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 as, the huge lump sum of tax amount they pay will be useful to improve many infrastructures of the
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. The number of immigration can be increased by attracting other
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's people with their no constraints on salaries as well as with their infrastructures.
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, it is equally important for a
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 when a few people earn extremely high salaries. Above all, in my opinion, government-regulated or unregulated salaries depends on the sector people work for.
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, civil job's salaries must be regulated by them whereas people working in private sectors or businesses can earn ungoverned high salaries.
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, earning a salary depends on the type of work and field.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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