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Some people believe that governments should pay for healthcare and education, but others disagree with this opinion. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is always a fierce debate when it comes to whether the government should responsible for the expenditure of
healthcare
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 and
education
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. Some people firmly believe that it is the government’s duty, whereas others argue with opposite the opinion. In
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 essay, Advocates of
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 statement based on both the personal and broader social level.
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health care
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.
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, the access to health and
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 is not the privilege belonging to the wealthy.
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 from the social viewpoint, it is no denying that it would be a considerable amount of money for individual to pay the
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 and
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, which would make the heavier burden especially for the poor. Namely, if it could be funded by the governments, it certainly could promote the equality between the rich and poor.
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, some dispute that
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 policy should be under the thoughtful consideration as there are several drawbacks.
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 with, there is not an unlimited budget for the governments, especially there still are so many practical problems crying for a solution
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 as environmental contamination and economic development.
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 definitely do require long term commitments and tremendous running expenses, and
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 cut down the budget on other issues.
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, the most direct benefited group of
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 policy is the individuals,
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 people should
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 require to pay for it. In conclusion, I believe that it is the responsibility of the authorities to cover a part of the expense of
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, whereas people should
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 shoulder the responsibility for it.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal healthcare
  • public education
  • taxpayer burden
  • financial stress
  • equal opportunity
  • workforce development
  • public health
  • literacy rates
  • tax revenue
  • government expenditure
  • inefficiency
  • long waiting times
  • accessibility
  • quality of education
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