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Inspite of the advances made in agriculture many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case ? What can be done about this problem?

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Nevertheless
, there is significant technological innovations in the field of agriculture, still many people in different parts of the world have no
food
 to eat.
This
 problem is predominant in underdeveloped countries. The reasons for
hunger
 are severe poverty and unemployment issues in the society.
However
,
this
 problem can be dealt with providing education to them and by giving foreign aid. Nowadays, a farmer can grow the best possible vegetables by using various technologies.
However
, there are places where the land is not fertile and people cannot cultivate.
In other words
, these underprivileged people from
such
 land are dependent on others for
food
.
In addition
, they are penniless,
hence
 they cannot support their families.
Further
, children
also
 suffer from
hunger
 and at times they may even succumb to death.
For example
, every year several children die in Somalia due to
hunger
. Another reason, if people are unemployed, they cannot afford to buy
food
.
Further
, If the sole breadwinner of the family dies due to
hunger
,
then
 an entire family will suffer. These problems can be resolved by providing foreign aid and by educating the people. Many developed nations do a lot of charity by providing
food
 to help the needy in a distant place.
For example
, UNESCO provides
food
 to people in places which are affected by drought and famine.
Further
,
this
 is a short term help to
such
 people.
However
, for long term solution these people need education. Because, when they are educated, they can sustain the burden of an entire family by doing a job.
Moreover
, they can even learn to preserve
food
 so that they can fight against
hunger
. In conclusion,
hunger
 exists in
this
 modern world because of unemployment and poverty.
However
, it can be resolved temporarily by getting foreign aide or permanently by educating the people.
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