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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In modern times, it is increasingly common for
people
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 to be valued based on their social status and the wealth they display, rather than on traditional virtues. I completely agree with
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 view, as society today tends to admire external success more than moral character. The shift in
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 is evident both in how individuals are perceived publicly and in the behaviour
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 rewarded in social and professional settings. One clear example of how old-fashioned
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 like honour and modesty have lost importance is the way
people
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 are judged by their outward appearance and material possessions. With the rise of social media, celebrities and influencers who showcase luxury lifestyles and expensive goods receive admiration and attention, regardless of their actual contributions or integrity.
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 suggests that wealth and popularity have become the new measures of success,
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 moral character is often overlooked.
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, many individuals feel pressured to focus on accumulating possessions in order to be respected. Another way in which traditional
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, including trust and kindness, have become less significant is in how personal and professional relationships are formed and maintained. In the corporate world,
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,
people
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 are often promoted based on results and image rather than reliability or ethical behaviour. Even in social circles, relationships may be influenced more by status or income than by sincerity or loyalty. The preference shows that
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 like kindness and trust were once central to judging a person’s worth, they now take a back seat to material and social achievements. In conclusion, I firmly believe that a person’s worth today is more often judged by their social position and material success than by their moral qualities. As society continues to glorify wealth and fame, old-fashioned
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,
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 as honour, kindness, and trust, are becoming less central to how
people
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 evaluate each other.

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Make sure to provide more specific examples to support your main points. For instance, mention a specific celebrity or a trend that shows this shift in values.
coherence and cohesion
Try to link your ideas more clearly. Use more transition words to show how one point relates to another.
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Consider elaborating on the consequences of valuing material success over moral values. This could deepen your argument.
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Your introduction clearly states your opinion, which sets a strong tone for the essay.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion nicely summarizes your main points, making it clear what you believe.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • social status
  • material possessions
  • old-fashioned values
  • honour
  • kindness
  • trust
  • empathy
  • media influence
  • self-worth
  • metrics of success
  • financial achievements
  • community contributions
  • superficial connections
  • emotional bonds
  • life satisfaction
  • stress and anxiety
  • policy changes
  • community programs
  • restoring balance
  • personal character
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