Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries. Many small local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities.

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Supermarkets have been expanded due to industrial advancement in some countries whereas local
business
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could not increase as same as large
business
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. Some people think local communities suffered close to death conditions, which is happing due to local
business
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are being shut down from the market. In my opinion, I completely agree that there are few reasons to abolish local
business
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,
consequently
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local communities led their
life extreme
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life in extreme
condition.
Firstly
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, local
business
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could not survive with supermarket as they
do not offers
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do not offer
broad a range of products as bigger to their
customer
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. At present,
customer
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test has changed and will not fix with any particular brand as they are looking same
product
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with
different brand
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a different brand
.
Secondly
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,
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customer
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the customer
will face
problem
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problems
a problem
when they
wants
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want
to buy bulk
quantities
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quantity
goods for their particular needs. As local
shop
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has a limited storage
facilities
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facility
so they maintain
product
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store balance in certain level for all local
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customer
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customers
.
Finally
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,
local
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a local business shop
the local business shop
business
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shop
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could not provide more job facilities owing to their
business
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area has a limitation, which consist based on certain group of people.
Therefore
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, they recruit
small number
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a small number
of people to serve their
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customer
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customers
.
For example
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, to run the local
business
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, shops need less staff compare to supermarket as their
business
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area and
customer
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have limitation.
On the other hand
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, local
business
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have
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has
strong
inter personal
occurring among or involving several people
interpersonal
relation
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relationships
with
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customer
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customers
a customer
the customer
because they can understand local community needs, demands and
also
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contribute to
societies
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the societies
. If
local
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the local shop
shop
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become
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becomes
close, communities cannot get their desire
product
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.
As a result
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, local
customer
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will visit
super
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a super shop
shop
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to buy their desire
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product but
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product, but
they have to pay
extra price
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the extra price
an extra price
as
large
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the large shop product cost
shop
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product
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cost will be high compare to local
shop
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, which they may not afford.
Furthermore
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, local
shop
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also play
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also plays
crucial role
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a crucial role
to develop societies
such
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donation in sports, entertainment and promote environment friendly activities. If
this
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type of
shop
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will stop their
business
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, societies will deprive from the above facilities.
For instance
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, societies organize different annual program to grow up public awareness with the financial support from
local
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a local shop owner
local shop owners
shop
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owner. In conclusion, If local
shop
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will not sustain in
market
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the market
along with super
shop
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,
communities
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community
life will be problematic as
super market
a large self-service grocery store selling groceries and dairy products and household goods
supermarket
will not grow up considering local people.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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