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Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?

#education #luxury #right #wealth
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 being the backbone of a nation is a vivid indicator of development. I partially agree with the view that
education
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,
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 the primary level of
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 should be free for everyone.
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 with, it is a natural human tendency that anything which is made free, declines in its value. The same can be the case with
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also
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. The reason higher
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 is viewed with so much of respect is that there is an immense effort which goes into acquiring it. If it was
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, a lot of students would not put their mind & soul into it.
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, making higher
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 free would even lower the motivation level of professors & faculties, thereby lowering the overall quality of
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.
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, there are chances that the failure percentage may increase in case
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 is made free as the student would not have to bear the burden of fees anymore. There are various ways in which the avenues of
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 can be widely opened & access made easy to every section & strata of people
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 as providing easy
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 loans with reduced rate of interest, introducing various effective scholarship policies to the meritorious students at the school level, maximum funding to colleges & universities.
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, the already existing Swami Vivekanand scholarship for the single girl child, for students from socially & economically backward communities has enabled India to progress in the field of
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 & research. To substantiate
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, it has been reported that the number of school dropouts has reduced from 25 million in 2003 to 8.1million in 2009. To conclude with, primary
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 should be made free, but higher
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 should be made more accessible & not completely free.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • accessible
  • social mobility
  • personal and professional development
  • overall development
  • equality
  • social disparities
  • access
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