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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advances in technology which can prevent and solve crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With
growth
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the growth
 and improvement in technical areas in the
crime
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 solving departments and other related departments,
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crime rate
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the crime rate
 has reduced significantly and with the aid provided by
this
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technology
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,
crime
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 can be solved faster and with ease,
moreover
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, prevented
altogerther
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
altogether
. Advancements in the field of computer
technology
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 and installation of cameras at various
crime
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 prone regions have created a shield of safety in the minds of the usual public.
Crime
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 departments can track these regions with ease and prevent any
crime
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 from happening. Police forces can act faster and reports of probable crimes are tackled with no time wastage due to communication issues or late reporting. Analysts and developers are hired in these departments to understand
criminal psyche
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the criminal psyche
 and to forecast crimes by region so that the available forces can be used more efficiently.
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, its not just growth in
technology
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 which has helped reduce
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crime rate
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the crime rate
crime rates
, but, awareness among the general public and better training of the criminal justice
deppartment
a specialized division of a large organization
department
departments
 and police forces have
also
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 helped in the reduction of
crime
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 rates. I would agree that
technology
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 has a major role to play in the reduction of
crime
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 rates. With the aid provided by the tools used by the concerned departments which are an advent of the advances
inn
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technology, crime
in technology, crime
ion technology, crime
technology
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,
crime
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 rates will continue to reduce.

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