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In many countries day by day rubbish(garbage) is increasing. Why is it happening? What can be done

It is true that there has been a consistent growth in the amount of
waste
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production
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produced
 in many countries
accross
to the opposite side
across
 the globe.
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 is largely due to growing
population
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 and
increase
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 in industries.
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 essay suggests ways to curb
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 problem.
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, one major cause of the ever increasing
garbage
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 world wide is the explosion in
population
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. As the number of people
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increase
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increases
 in a particular geographical area, so does the
waste
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 output. To illustrate, the local
Garbage
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 Regulation Commission recently reported that there has been a thousand-fold
increase
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 in the quantity of paper bags and plastics  collected from a dump
sight
the piece of land on which something is located (or is to be located)
site
 in Accra, Ghana between 2010 and 2011 alone. The report attributed 
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increase
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 to the fast growing 
population
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 in the area.
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, the increasing number of factories and industries is another key cause in both developed and developing countries. The
waste
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 being generated from these places is enormous and when combined with those produced from the daily activities of people, the
waste
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 output is indeed disturbing. Regarding ways to
minimise
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minimize
 excess
garbage
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, one possible method is recycling. Since a significant proportion of most countries'
garbage
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 is constituted of plastics, which are non-biodegradable, recycling them for reuse and stopping
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 production will drastically reduce the burden of increasing 
waste
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.
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, strict legislation in
form
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the form
 of heavy fines should be made to regulate the daily amount of
garbage
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 produced by industries. In conclusion, increasing human
population
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 and industrialisation are the major causes of the global
increase
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 in 
garbage
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. While these two factors can be difficult to control, an effective recycling method and strict laws on industries would go a long way to curtail it.

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