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Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is true that and caring for a
child
 needs great responsibility, and raising a
child
 is not an easy task.
However
, I disagree with the
idea
 that we should force all mothers and fathers to attend courses related to the childcare. In my opinion, the
idea
 that all future parents should take a parenthood preparation course is impractical. Many prospective parents have jobs and busy schedules, and they may not be willing to or able to attend regular parenting courses.
This
 raises the question of whether those who missed the classes, or perhaps refused to attend would be punished. It would be wrong to do
this
, and it would
therefore
 be impossible to enforce the
idea
 of compulsory parenting training.
Besides
, even if people were forced to do so, I think it would be too difficult to decide the syllabus of the parenting course that fits everybody because every individual has a different mindset.
Moreover
, I would agree that training for parents are unnecessary. Mothers and fathers of older generations have been
raising
Suggestion
raised
 without any formal instruction or an official interference for thousands of years. Parenting skills have been learnt from older family members, friends, neighbours.
Also
, some adults have an instinct that guides them during parenting, and many parents get better at the childcare by trial and error;
for example
, a good
parents
Suggestion
parent
 will try
developing
Suggestion
to develop
 different strategies for raising his
/
her
child
 properly, and in time he
/
she will eventually know which one fits best for him
/
her and his
/
her
child
. Neither of them mentioned in
this
 paragraph needs a compulsory course of parenting. In summary, whil
e taug
Suggestion
teaching
ht courses that parents are obliged to attend might sound like a good
idea
 for some, I believe that
such
 a practice is

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