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Some people think it is better to spend and enjoy their money once they earn it . Others think it is better to save their money and enjoy it in future. Which stand do you agree with and why? Use specific reason and example to support your opinion.

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There is no doubt that there is indifference among people in ways of utilizing their
money
. While some believe in having fun and spending
money
 rather than saving it, others argue it is better to save for
future
Suggestion
the future
 and enjoy luxuries later.
This
 essay agrees with the latter argument. Many believe in
leaving
the experience of being alive; the course of human events and activities
living
 in
present
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the present
, as
future
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the future
 is not
our
things belonging to us
ours
 to see.
Hence
, these
group
Suggestion
groups
 of people often spend their incomes without keeping it for later uses.
For instance
,
lot
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a lot
lots
 of young couples often take multiple trips to abroad without having any future plans or savings unlike their parents.
This
 approach may result in huge loss to them in coming financial crises.
However
,
lot
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a lot
lots
 of people do savings and investments in different ways which can be utilized in coming years
for
Suggestion
in
 fulfilling their dreams.
Generally these
Accept comma addition
Generally, these
group
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groups
 of people tend to have enough
money
 to deal with unknown crises. There is a common practice for saving at least 2% percent of income in various communities of
world
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the world
,
Accept space
,
 which can be used for difficult times.
Furthermore
, in India there have been evidence of saving gold and cash by the forefathers so that their children have a comfortable
lives
Suggestion
life
. To conclude, everyone has various
believes
any cognitive content held as true
beliefs
 about ways of living their life and spending
money
 and there is nothing wrong in spending
money
 without saving, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 completely agree with the belief of saving
money
 and spending it later.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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