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Both the poor and rich find the accessibility into university difficult . or disagree Do you agree?

#accessibility #university
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Nowadays, irrespective of their financial background
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 It’s hard for people to get admission in
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a
 university
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 I completely agree with
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 statement because the education standard have been raised to a certain level compared to the past decade.
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, as years pass the standard for quality education increases linearly.
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 creates a demand for more skilled
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students, therefore
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 they undergo a lot of filtering process before they get admission in
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a
 university or college. In that filtering process
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students who are really interested in studying the subject and who have a real passion for that subject are getting admitted. Most of the universities
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have
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 of segregating students. The process which they follow to isolate should be unbiased
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 there should be no sign of partiality or corruption in evaluating the students.
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, there are past records of people getting
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 to universities by showing their financial status
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, in the current scenario, there is no chance for
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 things to take place. Universities should conduct common examination for
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declare to be true or admit the existence or reality or truth of
admitting
 students.
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universities like Harvard and buffalo are conducting
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an entrance examination
the entrance examination
entrance examinations
 for all the students who are applying
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 of approach is appreciable because there is no leniency for the rich or poor
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everyone is weighted in a same
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. I hope one day every university in the world would follow the same pattern to recruit students. That will in turn produce good employees and those employees would thrive hard for the betterment of our universe. To sum up, everyone should be treated in a same
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 there should neither sympathy for the poor nor fear of the rich
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truly deserving candidates must be awarded for their hard work and get accepted in their dream universities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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