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over population of urban areas has lead to numerous problems. identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that government and individuals tackle these problems.

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It would not wrong to say that many countries are facing serious problems in urban areas due to the rampant increase of population. Both government and individuals have a duty to find ways to overcome these issues. It is an irrefutable fact that over population has the abundance of negative effects on society. An increasing number of people in urban areas cause unemployment and illiteracy. If the number of proportion is higher than people would face enormous inflicts in their careers like to get good and highly paid jobs. There are a limited number of vacancies in different organizations,
thus
 they cannot offer everyone a highly paid job.
Hence
, a lot of people remain unemployed.
However
, if people do not have employment, they would involve their selves in criminal activities and unemployment lead them to boredom and depression. Illiteracy is
also
 a major problem in
this
 contemporary world. Overpopulation has a direct link with illiteracy because if one country has a huge population than that country would fail to provide proper schooling facilities and good quality education. Poverty and poor health are
also
 a major menace caused by overpopulation. When people don't get proper resources they would not able to meet their day to day needs. It has been proved through recent researches in Pakistan that 28.5 percent of people are living below the poverty line.
In addition
, overpopulation caused pollution on roads and street and it would be deleterious to the people's health.
Hence
, in
this
 context, to tackle with these issues government should provide employment to the youngsters as much as possible and should provide quality schools, better education and good living standard.
On the other hand
, individuals have to control the birth rate of children. To recapitulate with, I would like to reiterate that providing a better facility and enough resources to the people would help in the sustainable development of society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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