Nowadays, many people spend less and less time at home. What are the causes of this? What are the effects of these on individual and society?

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It is true that the lifestyle of people i
s greatly changed
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has greatly changed
from the
last
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few years. Everyone is in r
ush
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a rush
to spend h
is more
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more time at his
his more time at
time
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in work rather than staying at home.
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, it has both positive and negative effects on i
ndividual
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individuals
the individual
as well as society. (46) We had seen in the past that people always lead a simple
life
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. They had limited resources and lack of education, but more
time
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to spend with their loved ones at homes. (32) Presently, the daily routine of individuals is totally changed in the modern way of living. Nowadays, everyone wants to spend less
time
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at home and more o
n
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at
work.
This
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is because of several reasons.
For example
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, in big cities, people always are in h
urry
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a hurry
to achieve high status in the society.
Similarly
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, the white collar p
eople mostly
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people, mostly
worked over
time
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in order to f
ulfill
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fulfil
the basic needs of their family.
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,
this
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phenomenon is not only creating a gap a
mong
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between
family members but is
also
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disturbing the social relations of individuals. (91) The recent trend of working for long hours has not only affects the physical and mental capacities of individuals, but
also
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has disturbed the social balance of society. Those who worked for long hours always remained in a state of restlessness with several health issues like headache.
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, if the people do not learn
time
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management,
then
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our new generation will surely have no
time
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to spend a
t
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on
homes. (69)
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, the people should perform their duties efficiently in order to run their financial circle.
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, there should be a balance between work
life
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and personal
life
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so that they spend a happy
life
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. (34)
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