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Band 5.5

Your company is going to organise a special training course for a few staffs. Your manager has asked you to find out if the local conference centre has the right facilities to hold this course. Write a letter to the manager of the conference centre. In your letter: give details about the course describe what equipment you will need for the course ask some further questions about the facilities at the conference centre

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 email on behalf of my company, Neobuild, to get information about
availability
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the availability
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 of the local conference
center
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centre
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.
This
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 is because our organization aims to conduct a training course for some of its
staffs
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staff
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.
This
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 course will be held on the 21st of June for 5 days with 50 people attending the event. We will have some precious guests and we have to make sure about the available facilities. We have planned to have two lectures per day
as well as
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 serve lunch. Because of the planned lectures, which I already mentioned, there is
requirement
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a requirement
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of
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 headsets, microphones, and projectors.
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, as I pointed out, all attendees will be expecting to have their lunch.
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, we definitely need to have
needed
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facilities to serve food and drink. There are two more points that I am eager to get more information about.
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, you are kindly requested to let me know whether all devices in the conference hall
in
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 good condition.
Secondly
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, I should be informed about conference assistants. Do we need to arrange
hiring
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 a couple of individuals to help us during the course or
the
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 center
takes
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 the responsibility of assigning them? Thanks for your kind cooperation, Looking forward to getting your reply,
King
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 Regards, Maria

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grammar
You should try to avoid minor grammatical errors. For example, 'its staffs' should be 'its staff' and 'King Regards' should be 'Kind Regards'.
task achievement
It would be good to specify what kind of lectures they will be to offer more clarity and a complete response.
logical structure
The letter has a clear and logical structure, making it easy to understand the request and requirements.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph focuses on a single main idea, contributing to the clarity of the letter.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is suitable and polite, which is consistent with formal business correspondence.
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