Research indicates that characteristics we are born with much more influence on our personalities and development than any experience we may have in our lives.

As some reports state, “The features we
have naturally have
Suggestion
have naturally had
much more effect on our personality and development than other experiences that we have in our life.”
This
is a controversial issue and it makes people confusing which
one
is the major influence that affects ourselves. For me, I think both of them are important;
however
, experiences have
much higher influence
Suggestion
a much higher influence
on us. Edison said, “Genius is
one
percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration.” I agree with it very much. Edison had some learning problems when he was little;
however
, he worked very hard, trying more than 1000 kinds of bulbs and invented the most useful thing, light in our world. He experienced a
lot
of mistakes and achieved great work. It shows that maybe he was not the smartest person, but a
perseverant
persistent determination
perseverance
one
. Take another
person
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person, for
for example
, Stanley Yan,
one
of the hotel presidents, wasn’t a good student at school.
However
, he went to a delivery company to become a fundamental employee and tried his best to learn. Through a
lot
of hard work, he became the president of the company. Afterwards, his leadership ability caught other people’s eyes;
thus
, he was asked to become the president of the hotel. From these examples, they prove that experience may have more influence to make people successful. After a
lot
of stress, mistakes, and hard work, the harvest of them all are much more meaningful. To sum up, in my opinion, the experiences you have may change your life. You can turn your weak personality or development into your strength by training yourself. Getting through a
lot
of experiences will make you stronger.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • also
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  • however
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