The government should control the Internet to reduce cyber-crime and ensure safety of users. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Internet
is considered as a stepping stone of globalisation because it allows everyone to connect or share with no geographical
boundations
.
However
, many countries are mulling towards curbing of freedom over
internet
to reduce
cyber-crimes
crime committed using a computer and the internet to steal a person's identity or sell contraband or stalk victims or disrupt operations with malevolent programs
cybercrime
and keep its citizens safe. In my opinion, control of
internet
Suggestion
the internet
would only expose the
netizens
to snooping by the
government
and could barely save them from
cyber
attacks.
Hence
, I do not support
this
idea at all and
reasons
Suggestion
the reasons
for the same are explained below. Undoubtedly, governments all over the
world
want to keep their people safe in
cyber
world
by taking control of
internet
services,
eventhough
Suggestion
even though
, if people will lose privacy
.
Accept space
.
When a
government
restricts
internet
freedom by recording every transaction taking place over it,
wantedly
or
unwantedly
, it stores data which could be private to so many people.
Famous eample
Suggestion
A famous example
Famous example
for
Suggestion
of
the same is of
chinese
Suggestion
the Chinese government
Chinese government
government
, which have all the rights over the
internet
activities and data so that they can fetch any personal information of a citizen whether it be their private chat or personal cam recordings. Resultantly, they try to save them from outside
cyber
attacks but
Accept comma addition
attacks, but
at the same time have all their personal information too.
Moreoever
in addition
Moreover
,
Internet
Suggestion
the Internet
is not
bounded
Suggestion
bound
to any one country. If a country tries to regulate the
internet
, it could do it partially which leaves the users at the helm of global attacks even after the regulations.
Therefore
,
this
type of tactics are only half measures which will have more adverse effects. An article
publsihed
prepared and printed for distribution and sale
published
by John Snowden, who is
popular whistleblower
Suggestion
the popular whistleblower
a popular whistleblower
from
USA
Suggestion
the USA
, shows
that only
Accept comma addition
that, only
better knowledge and updated softwares can save people from
cyber
attack and no other
government
policy can do magic. In conclusion, controlling anything to keep it safe can
works
Suggestion
work
as a good modus operandi in
real
Suggestion
the real world, but
the real world but
world
but it would not fetch fruitful results in the virtual
world
. Apparently, governments need to educate people about
cyber
security and
use
Suggestion
the use
of
internet
rather than having an eye on their data or limiting their access to
internet
Suggestion
the internet
.
Submitted by gakumarig on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Improve your IELTS writing score within two weeks
Instantly see mistakes you've made and learn how to avoid them.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Read more in the eBook

The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »

* free ebook for Premium users

What to do next:
Look at other essays:
Quick and easy way to check your IELTS writing task 1&2
Instantly see mistakes you've made and learn how to avoid them.