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Food can be produced much more cheaply,with the use of improved fertilizers and better machinery.However,some methods may be dangerous for human health and have negative effect on local communities.To what extent do you think its disadvantages over weigh its advantages ?

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Food
 is the necessity for human beings. Usage of proper balanced diet keeps an individual fit and healthy.
However
, with the passage of
time
 there are some methods which attributed the production of
food
 more cheaply within less
time
. These methods might have severe disadvantages and the same are discussed in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, Over the years, it has been seen that new methods and concepts introduced in the market.Of late, the ready to eat
food
 overtake the market rampantly. It is undeniable that in today's scenario, people are running a mad race and due to hectic lifestyle and schedules, these alternatives of
food
 acts as a boon. With the help of improved machinery and certain chemicals, scientists are able to preserve the
food
 for a longer
time
. One has to just boil it for paradigm period and the
food
 is ready to relish.
Moreover
, these
food
 changes could cause severe vigorous senility. In connection to
this
, the human body is uncertain and might be vulnerable to diseases due to significant chemicals. These may lead to heart diseases and stomachache. Moving
further
, the advantages are solely that it is less
time
 consuming, but beside
this
, there are numerous harmful effects that cannot be outweighed. Government must ban these kind of unhealthy
food
 stuff.
In addition
 to
this
, government must acknowledge general public through media
such
 as virtual media, by advertisement, social sites or by paper media like newspaper, magazine.
Additionally
, individualism
also
 plays a pivotal role. An individual must be aware about the side effects of eating these kind of
food
 in the long term. To recapitulate, I would like to say that relish scrumptious
food
 and fulfil the desire of having different kind of cuisine, with proper cautions and solely after knowing the goods and the bad of the
food
.
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