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Your local newspaper would like to have a new regular weekly feature on a subject of interest for readers. Readers are being encouraged to make suggestions sent in an e-mail to the newspaper. Write a letter to the newspaper. In your letter: Suggest a topic that you think would be popular. Say why it would be of interest Explain why it is more relevant/interesting than other topics

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Hello Dear Sir/Madam I am very excited to hear about your new initiative of adding people's favourite topics. Your newspaper has been my first choice to
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. It helped me in boosting my vocabulary and knowledge regarding general affairs. I would prefer to add business tricks or ideas, specifically, everyone would love to read about "how to make money". Nowadays, with rapid inflation, we should make ourselves smart enough to not
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 by it.
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, many schools have introduced business studies in their curriculum.
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, all individuals dream of a relaxing life with good money flow, It will be amazing to learn business
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 getting a daily dose of news. Despite the variety of topics,
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 subject will behold the reader's eyes. Undoubtedly, the newspaper article is the most reliable source for
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 information.These days, People can learn everything on
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 but can not trust it
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 investing their hard-earned money. I hope
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apply
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 You will find
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 suggestion helpful. Regards Rounak

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Consider revising the greeting to be more formal by starting with 'Dear Sir/Madam' without 'Hello.'
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Be careful with grammar; instead of 'not affected by it,' consider 'not to be affected by it.'
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Try to use more varied sentence structures to enhance readability and engagement.
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You clearly expressed your suggestion for a topic and explained its relevance well.
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Your passion for the subject matter is evident, which makes your letter engaging.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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