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Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources, while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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More and more countries have shown an interest in aerospace
science
 and it became debatable to many
people whether
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people, whether
 investing
on
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in
space
exploration
 is not worth the money or it brings a lot of benefits to humanity. The writer will discuss both sides of the argument and cite an opinion afterwards. Exploring the outer
space
 is expensive because
equipment
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the equipment
that is
 needed for research and experimental launching of rockets involves a huge
a mount
a quantity of money
amount
 of money and a risky operation since it is not all the time a successful mission and for
this reasons
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this reason
these reasons
 people would rather say that the government should focus on problems that humanity is currently facing here on earth
such
 as poverty and global warming which is far more important today.
However
, it cannot be denied that
space
exploration
have brought
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has brought
 a lot of benefits to the world. By investing
on
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in
this
 field of
science
, satellites can now give us reliable information on what is happening to our planet which leads to a better understanding
on
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of
 the climate issues that society is currently facing and
this
also
 makes people aware on how to
solved
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solve
such
 issues. Aside from that as the world becomes modernized the need for faster and convenient means of connectivity is a must
that is
 why certain projects like SpaceX is the most anticipated innovation in the
next
 coming years because it will provide the whole world a better and faster Internet connections even in the most isolated
place
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places
 in the planet by launching thousands of satellites that will surrounds the earth. In my opinion, Investment on rocket
science
 depends on the reason behind conducting
such
 studies which means that if a country is supporting a project for the benefit of life experience like providing an opportunity to people to travel to
space
 and walking in the moon
that is
 a waste of resources but if they are going to provide financial aid to aerospace
science
 for the purpose of imparting knowledge with regards to climate change
then
that is
 extremely worth of a country’s funds. In conclusion, both sides have a reasonable
arguments
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argument
 in terms of funding an
exploration
on
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of
in
space
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space, however
however
 the writer believes that it all rest upon the validity of
reasons
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the reasons
 when doing
such
 research and experimental studies and it would be truly acceptable to the masses if the
exploration
 will lead to a brighter future for humanity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • earthbound issues
  • tangible benefits
  • technological spin-offs
  • innovation
  • long-term investment
  • habitability
  • interplanetary travel
  • sustainable exploration
  • spacefaring nations
  • international collaboration
  • deep space
  • the final frontier
  • cosmic perspective
  • frontiers of science
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