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In order to study at university, students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that University education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#study #university #students #tuition #fees #people #education
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Several students forego
university
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education
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 as the tuition fees are very expensive. A section of the
society
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 believes that
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university
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a university education
education
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 should be funded by students, while a vast majority believe
education
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 should be free for everyone. In my opinion, tertiary
education
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 should be free as it provides several benefits, both to students as well as the
society
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. A primary benefit of abolishing tuition fees is that it provides equal opportunities to all students, irrespective of their financial situation. Today, most students from low income group skip
university
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 and directly seek employment or pursue vocational
education
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. Free
education
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 eliminates
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 barriers and provides meritorious students a chance to achieve their aspirations. Another benefit of free
education
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 is that students do not have to work to cover the cost of
education
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 and living expenses. A study by Harvard
University
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 indicated that over 75% of students in the US and the UK work part time to meet their course fees. Free
education
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 releases students from
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 burden and helps them focus on their studies. Increase in population of
university
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 graduates
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 has a long term benefit to the
society
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. It results in a skilled workforce in various areas,
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 as engineering, medicine, law and technology.
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 skills are in high demand and an employable workforce can boost the economy significantly and result in a higher standard of living. To conclude, free
education
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 provides students equal opportunities to pursue a subject of their choice and makes them highly eligible for employment. It
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 boosts the economic growth of the
country thereby
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country, thereby
 benefiting the
society
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 at large.
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