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children are addicted to smart phones. what is causes and solutions?

#children #phones
These days, the issue of children being highly engaged in playing smart devices is receiving a great deal of public attention.
Although
this
 concern can be attributed to a whole host of reasons, some feasible solution should be taken into account to address
this
 problem. There are several causes to explain why children are playing more on smartphones now.
First
, mobile apps are very entertaining, with sound and visual effects, and that arouses children’s curiosity. In fact, mobile games are specially designed to hold a child’s attention with fast actions and bright vivid colours, which are usually children’s eye-catchy.
Besides
, with all the different tons of apps, children can find them to play at any time all day easily.
Second
, because parents are working long hours to maintain a good standard of living, kids are left to have relaxation by themselves. Since it is dangerous to let children play outside unsupervised, they don’t have any chance to play sports but just rely on smartphones. Anyway, there are some potential solutions to address the problem of over playing with mobile devices of children.
First
, in order to change these children’s habits, some physical activities
such
 as team building, camping or playing sports needs to be promoted and be more available to them.
This
 encourages them to join in outdoor active entertainment activities
instead
 of staying all day in front of screens.
Second
, by spending more time of interacting with children, parents can break a screen habit in kids. In fact, some activities like reading books, playing games or riding bikes along with children are really helping, which triggers another interest in children and make them forget mobile devices. In conclusion,
although
 there are many reasons that caused children to stick to screens, some viable solutions are available to mitigate the problem.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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