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These days, mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Irrefutably, technology has a huge influence on people’s lives virtually all around the world.Mobile phone and
internet
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 are two popular examples of technology. .
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, according to my perspective merits are more than demerits about which I will shed light in upcoming paragraph.
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 with positive side, smart phone and
internet
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 is faster and reliable resources for communication with kith and kin around the globe. A valid illustration of
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 can be seen in the case of social media, people can do free audio and video calls using WhatsApp, Facebook, Instagram and so on. These aspects
has made
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have made
 our life easier and improved our relationship even with those people who are thousand miles away from us.
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, people can share their personal media like as pictures, documents, song, videos just in few seconds with each other.
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, these both technical advancements are
source
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the source
 of vast knowledge and medium of business as unlimited opportunities are available on the
internet
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 which can help any person to make
there identity unique
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their unique identity
their identity unique
 in the world and become successful person. Apart from
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, smart phones provide
opportunity
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an opportunity
 to get distinct opportunities from
itself
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it
 as it is
multi purpose device
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a multi purpose device
 having entertainment, photo and video capturing, education, games and communication facilities which is the way too beneficial for individuals.
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, there are some minor flaws in
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 kind of technical
things
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things, for
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example there
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example, there
 are some harmful websites or
internet
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 that can hack the personal stuff of people by corrupting their computers or phones. While, overuse of mobile phone leads to weak eye sight
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 quite critical for health as well.
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, it can be summarized that these resources are providing us comfort as well as easier lifestyle
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 why we should use it according to our need and government should
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 ban those sites which may harm the personal data
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 the feelings of people.

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