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Now days, the people have two options; watching the movies on smart devices and/or going tp theater screens. I believe it depends on the people which option suits their need well. Let's discuss both of them here before coming to any conclusion.

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The mobile phone technology is growing at
very fast rate
Suggestion
a very fast rate
, because of
this
; it's possible to explore high-end media on the smart-phones. Most people find it very easy and comfortable to watch their desired movies on their palm!
Besides
 that, some applications on smart phone give
wide range
Suggestion
a wide range
 of selection with high definition content.
For example
, the Netflix, a popular online streaming software, has countless movies of different genre. Top of that, those movies and series can be downloadable, it means, we can watch them later when we actually want. There are people,
however
, who never like watching their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 movies on phones. They believe that unmatched Dolby digital-sound and a cinematography could not be possible on mobile phones. I
also
 don't like it on smart phone when a five start rated movie has been released in the
theater
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatre
. The action scenes usually make me amazed when they are shown on 3D-Screen.
In particular
, the Lion-king, an animated cartoon movie, gets released on
last
 Friday. Most people gave more than four star rating after watching it in the cinema, in 3D format. By
this
 I meant that; our perspective about the movies could be changed, when we see them on the big screens. In conclusion, I think people like watching movies on both the formats. Both of them have their very unique advantages over each other. The former one offers easy access and comfort while the later one gives us best ambience. I personally believe both have equal opportunity.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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